Final Overview ;)

Hey everyone! In this blog, I’m sharing my full pitch for revamping the intro and reshaping the ending to enhance the element of surprise. To tighten the opening and create space for suspense, I proposed starting with a fade-in to Jasmine doing her makeup. Since we already have those shots, no extra filming would be needed for this part. Then, she gets a call from her boyfriend, Jonathan, and after a brief conversation, she rushes outside expecting to see him—but neither he nor his car is there. Originally, Jonathan was supposed to arrive, hug her, and then kill her in broad daylight. My revised approach immediately sparks questions and unease, as his absence after calling suggests something is off.

I also suggested that when Jasmine returns inside, the downstairs area should have a dark, warm-toned atmosphere to signal a shift in tone and build tension. As she reenters, we’d catch a glimpse of Jonathan in the corner watching her sit down. Then, the twist unfolds—she vanishes from the couch, and Jonathan suddenly appears behind her. However, he doesn’t see her in front of him—she’s actually behind him, making him the victim instead.

I knew my group wasn’t particularly focused on creating heavy suspense, but I struggled to find another way to structure the film without it feeling clichéd. Trying to cram both a montage and a murder into a two-minute film just didn’t seem feasible—it had to be one or the other. As it stands, our film lacks real thriller elements, so I pitched this idea in hopes that the twist would make it more concise, deliver a more original and unexpected ending, and improve pacing by trimming unnecessary buildup. I understand this is a major change, but I truly believe it will make the film feel more polished and engaging.